Romance Porn (NSFW)

richlevy · 06-04-2011, 08:38 PM

After reading (and re-reading) the first few chapters I can say three things.

1) It's a good story
2) It's pretty erotic, even if some of the sex acts are ones I would not ever consider.

3) It very badly needs editing. If I had a red pencil and printed out a copy, by the time I got finished it would look like one of those red checkered tablecloths you see in Italian restaurants.

Still, the plot is interesting enough to make it worth wading through the errors.

Sundae, we could make a game of it and see who spots more errors

. Bad writing doesn't count unless it violates composition rules.

On second thought, there really are so many that just keeping score would be exhausting. At the rate I found them, I'm guessing between 200-300 errors in 77 chapters. It's like there are two authors - one who comes up with a great story and the other one who makes 10th grade mistakes in spelling.

06-04-2011, 08:38 PM	#6
richlevy King Of Wishful Thinking Join Date: Jan 2001 Location: Philadelphia Suburbs Posts: 6,669	After reading (and re-reading) the first few chapters I can say three things. 1) It's a good story 2) It's pretty erotic, even if some of the sex acts are ones I would not ever consider. 3) It very badly needs editing. If I had a red pencil and printed out a copy, by the time I got finished it would look like one of those red checkered tablecloths you see in Italian restaurants. Still, the plot is interesting enough to make it worth wading through the errors. Sundae, we could make a game of it and see who spots more errors. Bad writing doesn't count unless it violates composition rules. On second thought, there really are so many that just keeping score would be exhausting. At the rate I found them, I'm guessing between 200-300 errors in 77 chapters. It's like there are two authors - one who comes up with a great story and the other one who makes 10th grade mistakes in spelling. __________________ Exercise your rights and remember your obligations - VOTE! I have always believed that hope is that stubborn thing inside us that insists, despite all the evidence to the contrary, that something better awaits us so long as we have the courage to keep reaching, to keep working, to keep fighting. -- Barack Hussein Obama

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