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05-26-2006, 11:17 AM
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erika
Join Date: Apr 2006
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Uh, I used gay cause tommy, in the song, is gay, as in he likes the cock. It's a glam ballad, and so the topic is suitably glam and ballad-y.
Take out the next-to-last verse? That's one of the most important, without it the story falls apart. Reread the song, thinking about it as a ballad, a story. EDIT: You critiqued it yesterday? When? I don't see a critique...
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