Monologue on Art

I wll b thankful 2 u if u read this aatachment and tell me what do u think bout it!

Mystic Rythm wrote:

I wll b thankful 2 u if u read this aatachment and tell me what do u think bout it!

2 things, and I'm gonna be as nice about this as possible.

1. You're Poll-happy. Stop it.
2. No one here will ever take you seriously until you prove you can spell, type, and have at least a basic mastery of the written English language. And maybe not even then, but at least it's a start.

tmi

Not so bad but needs a little work.....(My limited opinion) Try more sources like Susan Sontag. She wrote a pretty decent book reminiscent of your topic. (if memory serves)
Against
Interpretation
I'm going to use this opportunity to mention that Susan S. is one bad Mo. Fo. :D
How's that for the mastery of the English language? ;)

flippant wrote:

Not so bad but needs a little work.....(My limited opinion) Try more sources like Susan Sontag. She wrote a pretty decent book reminiscent of your topic. (if memory serves)

...That the novels of Susan Sontag are self-indulgent, overrated crap... Any chance to quote Bull Durham must be taken.

:zzz:

Griff wrote:

...That the novels of Susan Sontag are self-indulgent, overrated crap... Any chance to quote Bull Durham must be taken.

Discovering that one has nothing to say, one seeks a way to say THAT. :D
Susan S.

The nerve........ :p

You have a limited notion of art, defined as one person's reproductive intent. And the thermodynamic equations lost me. but hey, whatever.

one of my favorite Bull Durham lines:

"Let's pray!"
"No, let's not."

Griff wrote:

...That the novels of Susan Sontag are self-indulgent, overrated crap... Any chance to quote Bull Durham must be taken.

Try reading her essays which are what she is best known for.


OK, now back to topic. Mystic, my critique would be the same as the one I gave you before. You write in a rambling style, and the reader becomes bewildered and lost in the dense thickets of words.

I also get the impression that you have not finished thinking through the ideas you toss out. My second suggestion would be to sit down and decide exactly what conclusions you wish your readers to arrive at with you. State your premises and thesis in the first paragraph. Go through your writing with an editor's hard hearted soul, and slash your words down by about half.

Grammar and spelling DO count (as many on this board have reminded ME). Poor sentence construction and bad grammar will loose you your reader as fast as anything else. Take a brush-up course at the local community college.

I think you may have some interesting ideas beneath all that rubble of verbiage. Clean it all off, so that your thoughts have room to breathe!

marichiko wrote:

Grammar and spelling DO count (as many on this board have reminded ME). Poor sentence construction and bad grammar will [color=red]loose you your reader[/color] as fast as anything else. Take a brush-up course at the local community college.

emphasis added

That is possibly one of the funniest things that I have seen in a while.

Loose (v): To untie, unbind, unrestrict or to make free. In this case, to no longer compel the reader to continue forward (as all good literature does)

Marichiko now owes me a dollar, for saving her reputation

warch wrote:

You have a limited notion of art, defined as one person's reproductive intent. And the thermodynamic equations lost me. but hey, whatever.

one of my favorite Bull Durham lines:

"Let's pray!"
"No, let's not."

hey,hey, u dont know what notion of art do i have. just i love critics but then i hate imposed opinions!

alphageek31337 wrote:

Loose (v): To untie, unbind, unrestrict or to make free. In this case, to no longer compel the reader to continue forward (as all good literature does)

Marichiko now owes me a dollar, for saving her reputation

Ha, ha, ha, alphageek, what reputation? People have been jumping my case about my lousey spelling since I first started posting here. No dollar for you! :D (Thanks for the attempt on my behalf, however, and it is a rather elegant thought - to loose one's readers upon the world. Yes, I like that - like a pack of WOLVES set free!)

From the Columbia Guide's discussion of the terms "loose" and "lose";

"The chief spelling problem is the inadvertent misspelling of lose as loose."

Yeppers, I meant "lose" - guilty as charged. My mistake and Wolf's sharp eye and sardonic comment serve to illustrate nicely the point I was attempting to make.

I wll b thankful 2 u if u read this aatachment and tell me what do u think bout it!

I refuse to click on or read anything submitted by someone who think's it's ok to type like that here.

Maybe mystic rythm--or however s/he spells it--is so unbelievably busy being artistic and living life like the rain that s/he can't be bothered with conventional spelling! I'd imagine it's darn tough to have your life be like rain...all soggy and whatnot. Poor devil.

Good! People are dumber here than i thought! Good Good! NOw we will enjoy a lot!

Never underestimate the power of stupid people in large groups.

Mystic Rythm wrote:

Good! People are dumber here than i thought! Good Good! NOw we will enjoy a lot!

Yeah, but most of us don't really have a hard time with 2- and 3-letter words. Frankly I'm astounded we got an "are" out of you.

I tried to play nice.

Mystic Rythm wrote:

hey,hey, u dont know what notion of art do i have. just i love critics but then i hate imposed opinions!

:greenface What are you trying to say here? If I cross my eyes and read it does it form a clear statement? :question: