HAIKU

lumberjim • Mar 13, 2004 1:09 pm
I haiku, do you?

for those of you who missed this in school, haiku is defined as:

hai·ku Audio pronunciation of haiku ( P ) Pronunciation Key (hk)
n. pl. haiku, also hai·kus

1. A Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.
2. A poem written in this form.




So why don't you try
to write a haiku for us
and see how you do
elSicomoro • Mar 13, 2004 1:19 pm
Jimbo is a turd
He must have nothing to do
Quit polluting, jerk!
lumberjim • Mar 13, 2004 1:23 pm
that's a very nice
poem you sonofabitch
now go suck a dick
staceyv • Mar 13, 2004 1:37 pm
i love my coffee
hot, steamy and very strong
it gets me wired
elSicomoro • Mar 13, 2004 1:39 pm
What is wrong, Jimbo?
Did you not like my haiku?
The truth, it can hurt
lumberjim • Mar 13, 2004 2:10 pm
just be thankful, bitch
that i don't come over there
and tear your arms off





hey, this is really fun.

much more fun than regular pretty little haiku.

IT'S THE HAIKU INSULT THREAD!!
elSicomoro • Mar 13, 2004 2:24 pm
The only thing that
Jim will tear off is his dick
He jerks off too much
Griff • Mar 13, 2004 2:25 pm
whale penis baby
cellar madness haiku smack
bring it on biotch
hot_pastrami • Mar 13, 2004 2:43 pm
Haiku rocks. Haiku is the manliest poetry there is. Haiku actually promotes the production of testosterone. ([size=1]*cough*[/size])

Here are a few of mine from my website:

Help, I'm prisoner
Frolicking with ribbons and
Forced to look gleeful

Watch the fat lady
Draw circles on the wood floor
I want a tattoo

New doomsday device
No one knows how to use it
So call tech support

A belch of flame licks
The night as high waters suck
Life from the people

I don't like death rays
They make my gums and teeth hurt
Weep for me, Earthling

Stay awhile and wait
The smell is temporary
Stay out of my chair

Shout obscenities
Speak your mind, offend them all
Do not hide from truth

Excuse my rudeness
I am quite new to this place
So shut up, maggot

Crave the beef jerky
Salty, mysterious meats
Do not stay your hand

I have the Tourette's
You slimy, worthless crap stacks
Damn you all to hell

It's a puzzlement
Why is the small man staring?
Hit him with a shoe
blue58 • Mar 13, 2004 2:48 pm
what to do today
I can't rhyme stuff dumbass
oh man this sucks bad
Nothing But Net • Mar 13, 2004 2:50 pm
C-M-N-B-N

O-I-C-I-C-U-T

L-M-F-A-O
Elspode • Mar 13, 2004 2:59 pm
Inside the mailbox
A new Ebay purchase came
Antique light meter
lumberjim • Mar 13, 2004 3:07 pm
Originally posted by blue58
what to do today 5
I can't rhyme stuff dumbass 6
oh man this sucks bad 5



who's the dumbass now?
you cannot count to seven?
worse than sycamore!
Brigliadore • Mar 13, 2004 3:12 pm
I hate all haiku
never was able to do
fuck you to haiku

:)
blue58 • Mar 13, 2004 3:18 pm
Originally posted by lumberjim



who's the dumbass now?
you cannot count to seven?
worse than sycamore!


Ahhh fuck!!!! I actually changed "anyway" to "stuff".

You need to go spend time with your family LJ.
elSicomoro • Mar 13, 2004 3:19 pm
Pay no mind to Jim
He's just jealous because he
Can't compete with me
jinx • Mar 13, 2004 3:22 pm
LJim is working
He's not currently at home
Mind your own business
blue58 • Mar 13, 2004 3:25 pm
you are home alone
do you do phone sex or cam
jim will never know
lumberjim • Mar 13, 2004 3:27 pm
I am syc's hero
he wants to be just like me
but he's too stupid





syc, it seems to me
you only heckle my posts
ever since you left





you must miss me, pal
el ciberbosque cannot lure
me from the cellar




it's because you don't
even have your own t-shirt
or cd exchange
lumberjim • Mar 13, 2004 3:28 pm
Originally posted by blue58
you are home alone
do you do phone sex or cam
jim will never know




psst! dont show him the pictures!
blue58 • Mar 13, 2004 3:29 pm
pssst! Send the pictures ASAP. Blur out LJ's huge head.
jinx • Mar 13, 2004 3:30 pm
Phone sex is for chumps
No sex now, with kids awake
I scream much too loud
lumberjim • Mar 13, 2004 3:33 pm
Originally posted by blue58
pssst! Send the pictures ASAP. Blur out LJ's huge head.




heads!
blue58 • Mar 13, 2004 3:34 pm
Hey, whadya know...this is fun.
lumberjim • Mar 13, 2004 3:54 pm
I see the blue sky
and the sycamore trees bent
with the blowing wind
jinx • Mar 13, 2004 4:04 pm
Sell the money jim
to the suckers buying cars
Bring me home some cash

Fill my Jeep with gas
And change the kitty litter
When you get back home
elSicomoro • Mar 13, 2004 4:04 pm
Jimbo, you sound a
bit self-centered. Like it is
all about you, turd

I've given you shit
since day one. It's like you have
a "Kick me" sign on

You may have noticed
That I give lots of people
Shit. That's just my style

If you don't want me
To heckle you, there is a
simple fix for it

Quit giving me the
Ammunition to do so
But that might be tough

The only wind I
Feel is the hot air that comes
From your non-stop mouth

So, are you done yet?
What do you have to say now?
Make my fucking day
lumberjim • Mar 13, 2004 4:12 pm
my dear sycamore
what do I have to say now?
don't be such a troll

i wouldn't want to
hurt your delicate ego
and make you leave twice

Sycamore sounds mad
Like sand in his vagina
this must hurt like hell






[for the record] this has been, i hope, in good fun. You might be getting a little edgy, so i want to say that i really DO think you're a dick...no!... i mean, i was just kidding[/for the record]

:D
elSicomoro • Mar 13, 2004 4:17 pm
It's all good. I wasn't mad, but you have reacted poorly to people giving you shit before, so I wasn't sure where you were going with it. The first 3 were serious, but the rest of it was me trying to remain humorous.

:)
Brigliadore • Mar 13, 2004 4:18 pm
Its too bad we don't have an "inserts foot in mouth" smiley face.

Undertoad, you think we could get one just for LJ? :)
lumberjim • Mar 13, 2004 4:22 pm
i don;t taste feet. when did it go in?
Brigliadore • Mar 13, 2004 4:26 pm
[size=1]EDIT: Stuck my own foot in my mouth[/size]
jaguar • Mar 13, 2004 4:29 pm
As your local representative of reason and calm, I shall now bring you the world famous works of Doctor Toast .

A slice of calmness
In mankind's world of bloodshed
Spread some marmalade

Angry toastless man
Malfunctioning appliance
Senseless killing spree

Whole-grain metaphor
Anguish soon will dissipate
A bread transfigured

Intensely focused
I anticipate my toast
Somewhere a dog barks

Proudly I preside
Nineteen toasters hum in sync
A kitchen aflame

Scrape into the sink
Constellation of black stars
A toast neglected
elSicomoro • Mar 13, 2004 4:35 pm
(Keep in mind that I'm using the American pronunciation of "jaguar," which is "ja-gwar."

Jaguar? Reason? Calm?
What a bunch of damned nonsense!
What a fucking scam!
lumberjim • Mar 13, 2004 4:48 pm
Originally posted by lumberjim
I see the blue sky
and the sycamore trees bent
with the blowing wind


this wasn't a shot at sycamore...... we have actual sycamore trees outside the dealership, and they were blowing in the wind. it's a legitimate poem....well.........you know
elSicomoro • Mar 13, 2004 4:54 pm
Tasty, delicious
Nothing like it in the world
I love eating foot
noodles • Mar 13, 2004 8:12 pm
Hecklers boo and woo
Productive, instructive, cool
Japanese Haiku
lumberjim • Mar 14, 2004 12:31 am
all three horses stand
against the three rails of white
no shelter from wind


orange and blue sky
seen from the back of a truck
work is almost done


door in a stairwell
in grey paint on old window
the word "reflections"

in my mind i see
a picture folded over
is it me or her?


chinese poet comes
quoting work of Mao Zedong
it ryhmes in english


our poems don't ryhme
if we translate to chinese
will it ryhme to them?
lumberjim • Mar 14, 2004 12:43 am
Originally posted by hot_pastrami
Stay awhile and wait
The smell is temporary
Stay out of my chair


is this one called " i fart a lot in this chair"?
justme • Mar 14, 2004 12:52 am
1-2-11
17-28
33-15 :)
lumberjim • Mar 14, 2004 12:53 am
Originally posted by justme
1-2-11
17-28
33-15 :)


only 6 in 17-28 try 17-27
quzah • Mar 14, 2004 1:00 am
If we could shuffle the order a bit, and if I'm counting right, we could quote the Joker:

A little song,
A little dance,
Batman's head on a lance.

If not, ah whavever. I could never do these things right.

Quzah.
noodles • Mar 14, 2004 2:14 am
Thus says robert frost
poetry, translated, gets lost
rhymed versions do cost

Thus laughs lumberjim
translators out on a limb
laugh at me, not him
staceyv • Mar 14, 2004 2:43 pm
are we done with this?
it is driving me crazy
i was close before

now i am closer
to hell in a handbasket
and i am afraid
hot_pastrami • Mar 14, 2004 3:51 pm
Technically, a haiku's lines should all be stand-alone... a phrase should not span lines. I don't always follow the rules myself, however.

Improperly formatted Haiku. I'm such a rebel ([size=1]*cough*[/size])
Radar • Mar 15, 2004 10:01 am
I own all of you
because I'm the champion
of making Haiku
lumberjim • Mar 15, 2004 10:51 am
Radar:

I own all of you
because I'm the champion
of making Haiku



*******



hot_pastrami:

Technically, a haiku's lines should all be stand-alone... a phrase should not span lines. I don't always follow the rules myself, however.

Improperly formatted Haiku.


the champion, huh?

would you mind sharing a real one with us, then?
SteveDallas • Mar 15, 2004 11:06 am
Boring silliness
The Internet wastes my time
I'll go read a book
staceyv • Mar 15, 2004 3:55 pm
half cup chocolate
one and a half cups of cream
the mousse is so good

semisweet is best
heavy whipping cream's a must
first boil the cream

add the chocolate
melt the chocolate in cream
whip the mix up good

refrigerate it
now you are ready to eat
you will see heaven
Radar • Mar 15, 2004 4:22 pm
Formatting Haiku
Is not very important
if it all adds up

The number of lines
is fairly irrelevant
and the poet's choice

But if you insist, I can format my poem, to make you happy.
Radar • Mar 15, 2004 4:25 pm
Libertarian, defender of liberty, our last and best hope.
lumberjim • Mar 17, 2004 1:29 am
the night i noticed
as the river rolled by me
i was so happy
novice • Mar 17, 2004 4:39 am
I joined The Cellar,
Looking for enlightenment,
I got a T-Shirt
novice • Mar 17, 2004 4:42 am
Screeching, groaning, graunch.
Shuddering to a shaky halt,
My brakes need honing
novice • Mar 17, 2004 4:54 am
Greasy demeanour,
Poking in my cars privates,
"It's gonna cost ya"

Sigh. Resignation.
My baby monstered by this thug,
Go ahead, be gentle!

Belies appearance,
His surgery leaves no scars
She stops on a dime.
richlevy • Mar 17, 2004 1:43 pm
Annoying these are.
Much like Yoda-speech they sound.
Talk normal, dammit!
lumberjim • Mar 17, 2004 2:40 pm
:APPLAUSE: novice & rich.....good ones!
richlevy • Mar 19, 2004 10:09 pm
I read these haikus
Their fine precision moves me
Such exact rhythm
So precise the syllables
So LumberJim, tanka you:p
Slartibartfast • Mar 19, 2004 10:34 pm
Haiku Pikachu
I choose you to fight for me
Fast attack George Bush



Image of the Day
Cute animals on fridays
Pot luck otherwise



Google whale penis
The Cellar will be rank one
We stand by this cause



Haiku on diet
It has lost five syllables