Haiku

ZenGum • Oct 21, 2007 12:49 pm
How about a Haiku thread?

You know the rules:
five syllables
seven syllables
five syllables

I like them because they force you to compress your meaning into very few words.

I'll start:

Yoga-stretching clouds
Let shy stars play hide-and-seek
Summer city sleeps
BigV • Oct 21, 2007 12:55 pm
But it's light outside
only one star shines above
wake up sleepyhead
Sundae • Oct 21, 2007 12:58 pm
We did have a haiku thread - I loved it but it died a death
I'm happy to see a new one started

I seem to think in four and six syllable bursts, so I have to work at them
Just a quick attempt:

Gym again today
My October achievement
Toned but empty arms
BigV • Oct 21, 2007 1:07 pm
Hugs are exercise
Strengthen your arms and your heart
No gym is required
BigV • Oct 21, 2007 1:13 pm
Thinking, reflecting.
My past. My future. I have
only the present.
Sundae • Oct 21, 2007 1:33 pm
My arms are open
Always there and never used
Like a dodo trap
BigV • Oct 21, 2007 1:46 pm
Quit trapping dodos
No more passive gathering
Sundae Girl, Huntress
BigV • Oct 21, 2007 1:53 pm
Brains, beauty, passion
courage, humor, loyalty
Sundae Girl, man bait
Sundae • Oct 21, 2007 1:58 pm
Like the rising sun
Big V's generosity
Dispels my darkness
BigV • Oct 21, 2007 2:05 pm
I don't make it up
(my words shine light on the truth)
I just report it.
BigV • Oct 21, 2007 2:10 pm
procrastination
inertia and momentum
a deadly combo
BigV • Oct 21, 2007 2:15 pm
Fear! What will happen?
The ostrich's plan is my plan.
Paralyzed by fear.
BigV • Oct 21, 2007 2:33 pm
Domesticated.
Now all is new, having been
turned out by my pack.
monster • Oct 21, 2007 9:18 pm
So, I looked up Haiku earlier this year (they weren't a part of my schooling), and I understood that as well as the syllable thing, they were supposed to contain two related but distinct images/ideas (sentences) and have a seasonal/nature link. Am I wrong in this?

The one I wrote was this:

Released from classrooms
New growth awaits the learners.
Scrip is awoken.

I was pushing the scrip fundraiser, which is mainly used to fund the firld trip program at our school. It was spring, the time when the program starts up again after a winter lull, and also the need for $$$

The haiku worked -after that I got requests for poetry in my weekly newsletter and the $$ raised nearly trebled! :lol: I threaten them with horrible limericks if they don' raise more money!
Clodfobble • Oct 21, 2007 10:04 pm
BigV wrote:
Have one. Like a champ.
Non repairable. Flew it
Into the ground. Nice.
lumberjim • Oct 22, 2007 12:04 am
Cowboys win again
Viking's Ship is sinking fast
Bring on the Eagles
monster • Oct 22, 2007 12:08 am
Down in The Cellar
Dark warmth nurtures baby trolls.
Abortion? Debate.
ZenGum • Oct 22, 2007 12:33 am
monster;397802 wrote:
So, I looked up Haiku earlier this year (they weren't a part of my schooling), and I understood that as well as the syllable thing, they were supposed to contain two related but distinct images/ideas (sentences) and have a seasonal/nature link. Am I wrong in this?


Absolutely! (that is, absolutely right, not absolutely wrong). Go to the top of the class (and jump off).
Although the nature/seasonal link can be very indirect, and follows various obscure conventions, such as a reference to moss indicating autumn, or leaves spring. These examples are just made up for illustration purposes, don't hold me to them.
There is a similar style of poetry with the same syllable pattern, but which can be about politics or society. I can't think of the name right now, I'll get back to you.

I was thinking more of the western interpretation of the haiku concept, where we just follow the syllable pattern,

I once did software development feedback in epic haiku form. I made some notes for my proposal and realized they had fallen naturally into the haiku format ... the IT person was quite bemused.

Hey BigV is good at this, isn't he?
Spectacle • Oct 22, 2007 10:48 am
See the real world now.
Find a panoramic view.
Teach yourself today.
ZenGum • Oct 22, 2007 11:13 am
Am I cleaning plates?
Or making water dirty?
Or making dirt wet?
ZenGum • Oct 25, 2007 11:28 am
Like a proud parent,
I smiled as my new thread grew.
Sad to see it fade.
HungLikeJesus • Oct 25, 2007 11:42 am
Visiting with you
I really should be working
Just one minute more
ElBandito • Oct 28, 2007 9:51 pm
I ate meat last night
it sat heavily inside
boy do i stink now

darling petty games
exhaust patient hopes and dreams
i will play no more

did you not believe
me when I expressed my anger
with futility

letters words and lies
like a blade cut your love in two
sharpened on my pride

I string words like pearls
and I hope that you like them
as much as i do