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Old 06-19-2007, 08:38 AM   #31
DanaC
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I read this a little while ago and didnt have time to post a response at the time.

Sunsparkz I really liked this one. I especially like the second stanza.

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I don't think my skin can handle the aging smoke that fills the air

From the barrels of prematurely cocked guns, ablaze with ego and misguided flair

Thinking i had found love, i was just dizzy from the super-hold gel in your hair.
That last line is awesome.

I also love the final line of the poem. You've put in these great images throughout that are darkly humourous, but then you end with a line that has real gravitas. Love it.
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