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lumberjim · 03-13-2004, 03:22 PM

i don;t taste feet. when did it go in?

Brigliadore · 03-13-2004, 03:26 PM

EDIT: Stuck my own foot in my mouth

jaguar · 03-13-2004, 03:29 PM

As your local representative of reason and calm, I shall now bring you the world famous works of Doctor Toast .

A slice of calmness
In mankind's world of bloodshed
Spread some marmalade

Angry toastless man
Malfunctioning appliance
Senseless killing spree

Whole-grain metaphor
Anguish soon will dissipate
A bread transfigured

Intensely focused
I anticipate my toast
Somewhere a dog barks

Proudly I preside
Nineteen toasters hum in sync
A kitchen aflame

Scrape into the sink
Constellation of black stars
A toast neglected

elSicomoro · 03-13-2004, 03:35 PM

(Keep in mind that I'm using the American pronunciation of "jaguar," which is "ja-gwar."

Jaguar? Reason? Calm?
What a bunch of damned nonsense!
What a fucking scam!

lumberjim · 03-13-2004, 03:48 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by lumberjim
I see the blue sky
and the sycamore trees bent
with the blowing wind

this wasn't a shot at sycamore...... we have actual sycamore trees outside the dealership, and they were blowing in the wind. it's a legitimate poem....well.........you know

elSicomoro · 03-13-2004, 03:54 PM

Tasty, delicious
Nothing like it in the world
I love eating foot

noodles · 03-13-2004, 07:12 PM

Hecklers boo and woo
Productive, instructive, cool
Japanese Haiku

lumberjim · 03-13-2004, 11:31 PM

all three horses stand
against the three rails of white
no shelter from wind

orange and blue sky
seen from the back of a truck
work is almost done

door in a stairwell
in grey paint on old window
the word "reflections"

in my mind i see
a picture folded over
is it me or her?

chinese poet comes
quoting work of Mao Zedong
it ryhmes in english

our poems don't ryhme
if we translate to chinese
will it ryhme to them?

lumberjim · 03-13-2004, 11:43 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by hot_pastrami
Stay awhile and wait
The smell is temporary
Stay out of my chair

is this one called " i fart a lot in this chair"?

justme · 03-13-2004, 11:52 PM

1-2-11
17-28
33-15

lumberjim · 03-13-2004, 11:53 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by justme
1-2-11
17-28
33-15

only 6 in 17-28 try 17-27

quzah · 03-14-2004, 12:00 AM

If we could shuffle the order a bit, and if I'm counting right, we could quote the Joker:

Quote:

A little song,
A little dance,
Batman's head on a lance.

If not, ah whavever. I could never do these things right.

Quzah.

noodles · 03-14-2004, 01:14 AM

Thus says robert frost
poetry, translated, gets lost
rhymed versions do cost

Thus laughs lumberjim
translators out on a limb
laugh at me, not him

staceyv · 03-14-2004, 01:43 PM

are we done with this?
it is driving me crazy
i was close before

now i am closer
to hell in a handbasket
and i am afraid

hot_pastrami · 03-14-2004, 02:51 PM

Technically, a haiku's lines should all be stand-alone... a phrase should not span lines. I don't always follow the rules myself, however.

Improperly formatted Haiku. I'm such a rebel (*cough*)

03-13-2004, 03:22 PM	#31
lumberjim I can hear my ears Join Date: Oct 2003 Posts: 25,571	i don;t taste feet. when did it go in? __________________ This body holding me reminds me of my own mortality Embrace this moment, remember We are eternal, all this pain is an illusion ~MJKeenan

03-13-2004, 03:26 PM	#32
Brigliadore stays crispy in milk Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: A strange planet called Utah Posts: 270	EDIT: Stuck my own foot in my mouth __________________ I cant think of anything to put here so this is all I am going to write. Last edited by Brigliadore; 03-13-2004 at 03:29 PM.

03-13-2004, 03:29 PM	#33
jaguar whig Join Date: Apr 2001 Posts: 5,075	As your local representative of reason and calm, I shall now bring you the world famous works of Doctor Toast . A slice of calmness In mankind's world of bloodshed Spread some marmalade Angry toastless man Malfunctioning appliance Senseless killing spree Whole-grain metaphor Anguish soon will dissipate A bread transfigured Intensely focused I anticipate my toast Somewhere a dog barks Proudly I preside Nineteen toasters hum in sync A kitchen aflame Scrape into the sink Constellation of black stars A toast neglected __________________ Good friends, good books and a sleepy conscience: this is the ideal life. - Twain

03-13-2004, 11:31 PM	#38
lumberjim I can hear my ears Join Date: Oct 2003 Posts: 25,571	all three horses stand against the three rails of white no shelter from wind orange and blue sky seen from the back of a truck work is almost done door in a stairwell in grey paint on old window the word "reflections" in my mind i see a picture folded over is it me or her? chinese poet comes quoting work of Mao Zedong it ryhmes in english our poems don't ryhme if we translate to chinese will it ryhme to them? __________________ This body holding me reminds me of my own mortality Embrace this moment, remember We are eternal, all this pain is an illusion ~MJKeenan

03-14-2004, 02:51 PM	#45
hot_pastrami I am meaty Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: Salt Lake City, UT Posts: 1,119	Technically, a haiku's lines should all be stand-alone... a phrase should not span lines. I don't always follow the rules myself, however. Improperly formatted Haiku. I'm such a rebel (cough) __________________ Hot Pastrami!

03-13-2004, 03:35 PM	#34
elSicomoro Person who doesn't update the user title Join Date: Jan 2001 Posts: 12,486	(Keep in mind that I'm using the American pronunciation of "jaguar," which is "ja-gwar." Jaguar? Reason? Calm? What a bunch of damned nonsense! What a fucking scam!

03-13-2004, 03:54 PM	#36
elSicomoro Person who doesn't update the user title Join Date: Jan 2001 Posts: 12,486	Tasty, delicious Nothing like it in the world I love eating foot

03-13-2004, 07:12 PM	#37
noodles Wet Nurse's Aide Join Date: Mar 2004 Posts: 40	Hecklers boo and woo Productive, instructive, cool Japanese Haiku

03-13-2004, 11:52 PM	#40
justme Belt Conveyor Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: USA Posts: 66	1-2-11 17-28 33-15

03-14-2004, 01:14 AM	#43
noodles Wet Nurse's Aide Join Date: Mar 2004 Posts: 40	Thus says robert frost poetry, translated, gets lost rhymed versions do cost Thus laughs lumberjim translators out on a limb laugh at me, not him

03-14-2004, 01:43 PM	#44
staceyv Lecturer Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Ohio Posts: 927	are we done with this? it is driving me crazy i was close before now i am closer to hell in a handbasket and i am afraid

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