More songs I wrote, please crit?

Ibby · 06-07-2006, 11:19 AM

Breakdown, Breakout, Breakaway

Breakdown
In a world of hate
Freedom’s fight
The fate of many

CHORUS:
Why fight when you can love?
Make love not war, release a dove,
Spend some time with a girl you love,
Let time pass you by on the wings of a dove.

Don’t show
Sympathy for another
Helping man
Means helping the enemy

CHORUS

Solo (60’s vibe? CCR maybe? Not quite sure yet)

Peace sells
But who would buy it?
Angst and hate
Sell twice as much

Find a mate, and stay by her side
Leave all the pain and hate behind
When you’re at your true love’s side
Hate and fear will vanish behind.

Solo (Bluesy/jazzy yet sexy vibe – Brian Setzer Orchestra-y, maybe…)

xoxoxoBruce · 06-11-2006, 11:45 AM

Primal Muse would like the first one.

06-07-2006, 11:19 AM	#1
Ibby erika Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: "the high up north" Posts: 6,127	Breakdown, Breakout, Breakaway Breakdown In a world of hate Freedom’s fight The fate of many CHORUS: Why fight when you can love? Make love not war, release a dove, Spend some time with a girl you love, Let time pass you by on the wings of a dove. Don’t show Sympathy for another Helping man Means helping the enemy CHORUS Solo (60’s vibe? CCR maybe? Not quite sure yet) Peace sells But who would buy it? Angst and hate Sell twice as much Find a mate, and stay by her side Leave all the pain and hate behind When you’re at your true love’s side Hate and fear will vanish behind. Solo (Bluesy/jazzy yet sexy vibe – Brian Setzer Orchestra-y, maybe…) __________________ not really back, you didn't see me, i was never here shhhhhh

06-11-2006, 11:45 AM	#2
xoxoxoBruce The future is unwritten Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 71,105	Primal Muse would like the first one. __________________ The descent of man ~ Nixon, Friedman, Reagan, Trump.

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