Marine wedding.

[dar512]

Originally Posted by marichiko

OK, the first sentence begins with a conjunction, which is a no-no.

Not really a no-no. See this page

Originally Posted by marichiko

The phrase “country western singers played guitars and sang love songs” is both confusing and redundant.

Yeah, I'll go along with this.

Originally Posted by marichiko

“The groom took her by the hand” – took whom? The flower girl?

The referent is implied in the previous sentence. This is a wedding we're talking about. Are you really confused?

Originally Posted by marichiko

This could actually be a powerful thought instead of sentimental tripe:

My guess is that this is your real issue. We'll have to agree to disagree on this one. I'm an old softy. It's well known that I get the sniffles at AT&T and Hallmark commercials.

And I'm a sucker for sentimental tripe.

Originally Posted by dar512

This is a wedding we're talking about. Are you really confused?

Yes. As Crystal walked out of the glen and across a footbridge over Dempsey Creek, the flower girl sprinkled rose petals at her feet while country western singers played guitars and sang love songs. The subject of the sentence preceeding that statement is the flower girl, not Crystal. The reader shouldn't be left to resolve such quandries on his own. Its very awkward phrasing.

Originally Posted by dar512

My guess is that this is your real issue. We'll have to agree to disagree on this one. I'm an old softy. It's well known that I get the sniffles at AT&T and Hallmark commercials.

And I'm a sucker for sentimental tripe.

I can be a sucker for sentimental tripe, myself. I like my sentimental tripe to be well written, however.

[dar512]

Originally Posted by marichiko

I can be a sucker for sentimental tripe, myself. I like my sentimental tripe to be well written, however.

How can you surf the net, then? Doesn't your head explode?

Personally, I'm just happy when the writer doesn't confuse your and you're, their and they're, anxious and eager, etc.

Originally Posted by dar512

How can you surf the net, then? Doesn't your head explode?

Personally, I'm just happy when the writer doesn't confuse your and you're, their and they're, anxious and eager, etc.

I generally don't cruise the net looking for sentimental tripe. If I want that, I'll pick up a romance novel at a garage sale or something. Usually those have at least had to pass the eye of a proof reader, sometimes even an editor.