Haiku

ZenGum · 10-21-2007, 11:49 AM

How about a Haiku thread?

You know the rules:
five syllables
seven syllables
five syllables

I like them because they force you to compress your meaning into very few words.

I'll start:

Yoga-stretching clouds
Let shy stars play hide-and-seek
Summer city sleeps

BigV · 10-21-2007, 11:55 AM

But it's light outside
only one star shines above
wake up sleepyhead

Sundae · 10-21-2007, 11:58 AM

We did have a haiku thread - I loved it but it died a death
I'm happy to see a new one started

I seem to think in four and six syllable bursts, so I have to work at them
Just a quick attempt:

Gym again today
My October achievement
Toned but empty arms

BigV · 10-21-2007, 12:07 PM

Hugs are exercise
Strengthen your arms and your heart
No gym is required

BigV · 10-21-2007, 12:13 PM

Thinking, reflecting.
My past. My future. I have
only the present.

Sundae · 10-21-2007, 12:33 PM

My arms are open
Always there and never used
Like a dodo trap

BigV · 10-21-2007, 12:46 PM

Quit trapping dodos
No more passive gathering
Sundae Girl, Huntress

BigV · 10-21-2007, 12:53 PM

Brains, beauty, passion
courage, humor, loyalty
Sundae Girl, man bait

Sundae · 10-21-2007, 12:58 PM

Like the rising sun
Big V's generosity
Dispels my darkness

BigV · 10-21-2007, 01:05 PM

I don't make it up
(my words shine light on the truth)
I just report it.

BigV · 10-21-2007, 01:10 PM

procrastination
inertia and momentum
a deadly combo

BigV · 10-21-2007, 01:15 PM

Fear! What will happen?
The ostrich's plan is my plan.
Paralyzed by fear.

BigV · 10-21-2007, 01:33 PM

Domesticated.
Now all is new, having been
turned out by my pack.

monster · 10-21-2007, 08:18 PM

So, I looked up Haiku earlier this year (they weren't a part of my schooling), and I understood that as well as the syllable thing, they were supposed to contain two related but distinct images/ideas (sentences) and have a seasonal/nature link. Am I wrong in this?

The one I wrote was this:

Released from classrooms
New growth awaits the learners.
Scrip is awoken.

I was pushing the scrip fundraiser, which is mainly used to fund the firld trip program at our school. It was spring, the time when the program starts up again after a winter lull, and also the need for $$$

The haiku worked -after that I got requests for poetry in my weekly newsletter and the $$ raised nearly trebled!

I threaten them with horrible limericks if they don' raise more money!

ZenGum · 10-21-2007, 11:33 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by monster

So, I looked up Haiku earlier this year (they weren't a part of my schooling), and I understood that as well as the syllable thing, they were supposed to contain two related but distinct images/ideas (sentences) and have a seasonal/nature link. Am I wrong in this?

Absolutely! (that is, absolutely right, not absolutely wrong). Go to the top of the class (and jump off).
Although the nature/seasonal link can be very indirect, and follows various obscure conventions, such as a reference to moss indicating autumn, or leaves spring. These examples are just made up for illustration purposes, don't hold me to them.
There is a similar style of poetry with the same syllable pattern, but which can be about politics or society. I can't think of the name right now, I'll get back to you.

I was thinking more of the western interpretation of the haiku concept, where we just follow the syllable pattern,

I once did software development feedback in epic haiku form. I made some notes for my proposal and realized they had fallen naturally into the haiku format ... the IT person was quite bemused.

Hey BigV is good at this, isn't he?

10-21-2007, 11:49 AM	#1
ZenGum Doctor Wtf Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: Badelaide, Baustralia Posts: 12,861	Haiku How about a Haiku thread? You know the rules: five syllables seven syllables five syllables I like them because they force you to compress your meaning into very few words. I'll start: Yoga-stretching clouds Let shy stars play hide-and-seek Summer city sleeps

10-21-2007, 11:55 AM	#2
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	But it's light outside only one star shines above wake up sleepyhead __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 11:58 AM	#3
Sundae polaroid of perfection Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: West Yorkshire Posts: 24,185	We did have a haiku thread - I loved it but it died a death I'm happy to see a new one started I seem to think in four and six syllable bursts, so I have to work at them Just a quick attempt: Gym again today My October achievement Toned but empty arms __________________ Life's hard you know, so strike a pose on a Cadillac

10-21-2007, 12:07 PM	#4
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	Hugs are exercise Strengthen your arms and your heart No gym is required __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 12:13 PM	#5
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	Thinking, reflecting. My past. My future. I have only the present. __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 12:33 PM	#6
Sundae polaroid of perfection Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: West Yorkshire Posts: 24,185	My arms are open Always there and never used Like a dodo trap __________________ Life's hard you know, so strike a pose on a Cadillac

10-21-2007, 12:46 PM	#7
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	Quit trapping dodos No more passive gathering Sundae Girl, Huntress __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 12:53 PM	#8
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	Brains, beauty, passion courage, humor, loyalty Sundae Girl, man bait __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 12:58 PM	#9
Sundae polaroid of perfection Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: West Yorkshire Posts: 24,185	Like the rising sun Big V's generosity Dispels my darkness __________________ Life's hard you know, so strike a pose on a Cadillac

10-21-2007, 01:05 PM	#10
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	I don't make it up (my words shine light on the truth) I just report it. __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 01:10 PM	#11
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	procrastination inertia and momentum a deadly combo __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 01:15 PM	#12
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	Fear! What will happen? The ostrich's plan is my plan. Paralyzed by fear. __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 01:33 PM	#13
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	Domesticated. Now all is new, having been turned out by my pack. __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 08:18 PM	#14
monster I hear them call the tide Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Perpetual Chaos Posts: 30,852	So, I looked up Haiku earlier this year (they weren't a part of my schooling), and I understood that as well as the syllable thing, they were supposed to contain two related but distinct images/ideas (sentences) and have a seasonal/nature link. Am I wrong in this? The one I wrote was this: Released from classrooms New growth awaits the learners. Scrip is awoken. I was pushing the scrip fundraiser, which is mainly used to fund the firld trip program at our school. It was spring, the time when the program starts up again after a winter lull, and also the need for $$$ The haiku worked -after that I got requests for poetry in my weekly newsletter and the $$ raised nearly trebled! I threaten them with horrible limericks if they don' raise more money! __________________ The most difficult thing is the decision to act, the rest is merely tenacity Amelia Earhart

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