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Torrere · 09-23-2003, 03:11 PM

Spun disc slices air
Excited young man rises
Frisbee caught in hand

Bitman, might it be a good way to write haiku if the first and second lines are descriptive of ideas, and the third line exposes both for metaphors relating to the same thing?

09-23-2003, 03:11 PM	#6
Torrere a real smartass Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: Kirkland, WA Posts: 1,121	Spun disc slices air Excited young man rises Frisbee caught in hand Bitman, might it be a good way to write haiku if the first and second lines are descriptive of ideas, and the third line exposes both for metaphors relating to the same thing?