I read this a little while ago and didnt have time to post a response at the time.
Sunsparkz I really liked this one. I especially like the second stanza.
Quote:
I don't think my skin can handle the aging smoke that fills the air
From the barrels of prematurely cocked guns, ablaze with ego and misguided flair
Thinking i had found love, i was just dizzy from the super-hold gel in your hair.
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That last line is awesome.
I also love the final line of the poem. You've put in these great images throughout that are darkly humourous, but then you end with a line that has real gravitas. Love it.