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DanaC 10-01-2013 05:10 PM

Sugar Devil (work in progress)
 
Sugar Devil

Sugar devil
Come to me,
Tempt me with your artistry
Whirls and swirls
and chocolate curls
This one just for the girls

Sugar devil
come to me
Tempt me with your sophistry
Light and slight
And wrapper bright
Won’t spoil your appetite

DanaC 10-01-2013 05:16 PM

hmmm. Am thinking that second verse should maybe say 'soothe me with your sophistry'.

infinite monkey 10-01-2013 05:30 PM

'soothe' has a certain poetic agreement.

moar!

Lamplighter 10-01-2013 05:42 PM

Consistency is the hobgoblin of ....

Sugar devil
come to me
Tempt me with your sophistry
Light and slight
And wrapper bright
Won’t spoil my appetite

DanaC 10-01-2013 06:03 PM

Yeah, I see what you mean. But that line is paraphrasing an advertising slogan. "The sweet you can eat between meals without spoiling your appetite'. So that's the sophistry.


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