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JBKlyde 05-19-2012 10:25 AM

Empty Tomb
 
It's an empty tomb,
Jesus has risen,
It's an empty tomb,
Come share your wisdom,
Down with the gloom,
Down with the doom,
I ain't got no room for fear,
Turn from evil,
And start drawing near,
Near to God,
Near to Love,
Set your sights,
On things above,
It's an empty tomb,
Jesus has risen,
It's an empty tomb,
Come share your wisdom,

y-f-t-p

DanaC 05-19-2012 10:33 AM

n-y-f-t-p


:p

JBKlyde 05-19-2012 08:18 PM

radio edit

It's an empty tomb,
Jesus has risen,
It's an empty tomb,
Come share your wisdom,
To hell with the gloom,
To hell with the doom,
I ain't got no room for fear,
Turn from evil,
And start drawing near,
Near to God,
Near to Love,
Set your sights,
On things above,
It's an empty tomb,
Jesus has risen,
It's an empty tomb,
Come share your wisdom,

sexobon 05-19-2012 09:02 PM

IMHO, the OP version was better. The opposite actions complement each other:
...
Jesus has risen,
...
Down with the gloom,
Down with the doom,
...
Jesus has risen,
...

Your changes would better compliment the other lines if you changed action to place elsewhere too:
...
Jesus ascends to heaven,
...
To hell with the gloom,
To hell with the doom,
...
Jesus ascends to heaven,
...

Even then I'd still prefer the OP version.

Spexxvet 05-21-2012 10:02 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by JBKlyde (Post 812286)
It's an empty tomb,
Jesus has risen,
It's an empty tomb,
Come share your wisdom,
Down with the gloom,
Down with the doom,
I ain't got no room for fear,
Turn from evil,
And start drawing near,
Near to God,
Near to Love,
Set your sights,
On things above,
It's an empty tomb,
Jesus has risen,
It's an empty tomb,
Come share your wisdom,

y-f-t-p

Jesus, Jesus bo Besus Bonana fanna fo Fesus
Fee fy mo Mesus, Jesus!

Undertoad 05-21-2012 10:12 AM

Its only a paper tomb
Sailing over cardboard Galilee
But it wouldn't be make-believe
If you believed in Je (sus)
Yes, it's only a Jewish sky
Hanging over a Muslim tree
But it wouldn't be make-believe
If you believed in Je (sus)
Without your faith
It's a honky-tonk parade
Without your faith
It's a melody played in a penny arcade
It's a Barnum and Bailey world
Just as phony as it can be
But it wouldn't be make-believe
If you believed in Je (sus)

BigV 05-21-2012 10:47 AM

Ouch. That was pretty awesome!

DanaC 05-21-2012 11:10 AM

Wow. That totally rocked.

sexobon 05-21-2012 07:19 PM

A really gee-whiz adaptation.

JBKlyde 05-22-2012 07:29 PM

yes that was nice undertoad...

infinite monkey 05-23-2012 09:18 AM

It's a clone-thread, a parody, and an original work, all in one!

It’s an empty comb
My hair has a schism
It’s an empty comb
Come share your wigdom
Get out the broom
Sweep up the room
I ain’t got no hair up here
Ate by boll weevils
Just as I feared
Near to bald
But I’m proud of
The smooth leather-like glove
Left by my empty comb
My hair has a schism
It’s an empty comb
Come share your wigdom

Ibby 05-24-2012 04:34 PM

It's an empty tomb,
Jesus has risen,
It's an empty tomb,
Come share your
wisdom,
Down with the gloom,
Down with the doom,

I ain't got no room for fear,
Turn from evil,
And start drawing near,
Near to God,
Near
to Love
Set your sights,
On things above,
It's an empty tomb,
Jesus has risen,
It's an empty tomb,
Come share your wisdom,

TheMercenary 06-14-2012 10:21 PM

The Empty Uterus
bares no fruit
Jesus needed no uterus
He needs not your love
You need his


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