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Even The Birds
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Very nice, Ibram. I enjoyed it.
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Ibram--did you write this?
I'm very impressed. Cool and creepy. Reminds me of The Stand. Rats in the corn! |
I wrote it, and in addition,
the photograph, in truth, is mine also, (though it was colour before i edited it) |
I've never been any good at cold reading.
I'd like to see this read through (youtube?) How long is it supposed to last? I assume it's a short piece? It's a fun premise, and I like the sparsity of the lines and the fact it's a simple two-hander. I'm not sure if it builds enough though. The audience know something that Rich does very early on, which cues them for the denouement. Just a thought. |
On a second read-through, I'm not sure I get the whole "package of white powder" thing. In fact, I'm not sure why Bentley needs to be talking on the phone at all, either time. Why does he have a conspirator (Vern) in his quality corn-fertilizing? ;) It's not really necessary to show that something sinister is up, beyond the suspicious tale of Marge's death. If you cut VI and VII, and trim V a bit, it still flows properly into VIII.
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The package, as i see it
is not for the corn or Rich but just drugs, plain and simple Bentley sells it, and now Rich knows it. Bentley has to take care of his little problem, now... so he takes care of Rich, in the most final way he can. at least, that's how i see it. |
Wait... so the whole point is just that he kills Rich? That's it?
Dude. I had this whole other interpretation of it... I thought the well was out in the corn field, and the dead bodies (first Marge, and now Rich) were the reason the corn is so damn tasty. He's adding dead people as necessary to keep the crop spectacular. That really wasn't what you were implying? Wow. I'm kind of screwed up in the head. |
That makes two of us then. I thought the same thing. Extra flavor and fertilizer to boot.
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bone meal is good fertilizer, isn't it? or is it a poison . . . can't remember.
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I' m with Cloud. That's certainly where my interpretation was heading.
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ah, but you should know
never to trust the author. in fact, i must say i would have written that but for the fact that i felt that i may be ripping off a certain stephen king book. However, once again, never trust the author. I think I may rewrite it, in fact, to include both the input here and the input of a close friend very experienced in theatre. I'll keep you posted. |
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Sounds like "secret window".
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Stephen Kingish
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Uh oh.
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*nods* yeah. Dark. I like it.
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